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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use in Canada.

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The table illustrates the
percentage
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 of journeys made by a variety of forms of transport in four countries, which are
Canada
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, Belgium, Germany and Netherland. The bar graph demonstrates the results of a survey into car use in
Canada
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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car
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the car
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 is the major transport method among
four
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the four
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 countries.
In contrast
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, journeys made by bicycle and others are relatively low. When it comes to
the
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apply
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car use in
Canada
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, no alternative and the need for
work
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 account for
high
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a high
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percentage
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,
while
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work
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 nightshift shows the lowest. Looking at the table, journeys made by cars
dominates
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 the transport method in the four countries. Notably, in
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Canada
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Canada,
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 it accounts for more than 90%. In comparison, in Netherland, bicycles and on foot have
high
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a high
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percentage
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 with 26% and 18% respectively. Looking at the bar chart, no alternative accounts for a high
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with
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, with
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 approximately 38
%
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%,
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followed by the need for
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. Meanwhile, the
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nightshift
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night shift
 shows the lowest with around 8%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 81%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, canada, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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