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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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 attending various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.
Overall
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,
although
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 most activities showed fluctuations or increases, amateur dramatics was the only activity that showed a decrease after 2005. After 2010, the
number
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 of
people
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 who participated in table tennis increased significantly,
while
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 the film club and martial arts showed some fluctuations;
however
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, they remained relatively stable. The highest
number
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 of
people
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 participated in the film club, and
this
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 figure fluctuated between 60 and 70.
In contrast
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, after 2005, the
number
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 of
people
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 attending amateur dramatics fell significantly.
Consequently
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, between 5 and 10
people
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 attended amateur dramatics in 2020. After 2010, the
number
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 of
people
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 who participated in table tennis increased significantly, and the graph indicates that nearly 50
people
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 participated in 2020.
On the other hand
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, the film club and martial arts showed a similar pattern, with some fluctuations from 2000 to 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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