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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part pf high school programmes ( for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I agree
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 an extent
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 example i do believe that these topics should get more attention to teach children respect, empathy and help them stay healthier by teaching
younger
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the younger
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 generation sports
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this
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 will surely help them in their future careers, social lives and
get
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help them get
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 better
in socializing
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. Some people may think it is
neccesary
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necessary
 to give children
these
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this
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 type of responsibilites and some people may think it isnt neccesary to do so. But
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 believe it should be a part of compulsory part of pf high school programmes.

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Give a clear answer in the first line. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree.
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Add one main idea in each body part and explain it more.
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Use one real or clear example to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Write in clear parts: introduction, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words like first, also, for example, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas connect better. Now some lines repeat the same point.
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You give your opinion and stay on the topic.
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You mention good ideas like respect, empathy, health, and social life.
coherence and cohesion
There is a short opening and a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
Some link words are used, like but and for example.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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