The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevent.

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The bar chart compares the annual record of weekly household spending categorised under eight groups between 1968 and 2018. Generally speaking, household spending
experience
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a major change throughout
5
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the 5
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decades.
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several items
increase
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in expense during 2018, food expense in 1968 was the highest record
overall
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.
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the diagram,
it is clear that
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there were three items
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that surged
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considerably, including housing, leisure, and transport, which doubled their original figures.
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,
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apply
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the remaining four
,
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consist of food
fuel
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, fuel
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and power, personal goods, fuel and power
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decreased slightly, the
houshold
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household
goods remained unchanged through the entire decade. Taking a closer look at the data, food was the biggest of household expenditure (35%), before
then
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dipped half of its initial level (17%),
while
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the other three fell noticeably, amounting to one in two.
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, housing and vacation figures underwent a sharp
growing
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growth
,
making
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reaching
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around double
of its
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their
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original
unit
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units
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.
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, transport generated about 9% higher after 50 years

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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