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The internet is an amazing invention which has changed the world. Many people us it. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

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The
internet
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 its imprtant for many
people
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students,
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 and teenagers in
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their lives
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The
internet
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 has many advantages and
disadvantages
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 for everyone who
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uses
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 and
disadvantages
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 to know how the
internet
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 can change the life alote of
people
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internet
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 is an amazing invention for communication between
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example
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 everyone can contact
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each other between
diffrent countrys
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different countries
, build new relationships and know new
people
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With a
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last
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 5 years (during and after corona pandamic
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the
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helps
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people
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 and students to completed they educations,
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, students can joinig the calsses, courses and research for
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presentations
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Also
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internet
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 is a perfect
choises
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choice
 to search
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 many informations,
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people
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 to know a new news.
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, the
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also
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 has many
disadvantages
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 for
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 who want
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 bad things
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 waste
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time
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feeling
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feel
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 the value
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 time. Some hackers used the
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 for stole mony and destroy website companies and
goverment
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government
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, some
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bad
people
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 used the
internet
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 to visit the bad wibsites and they use it to
communicat
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communicate
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bad
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other bad
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people
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most of
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the advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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about
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 and how
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people
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 can use the
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 things or for
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bad things.

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. You write about good and bad points, but some ideas are short.
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Give one more clear example for each main point. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one clear main idea. This helps the reader follow your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a clear way, like First, Also, However, and Finally.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts now feel a little hard to follow.
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You answer the topic and talk about both advantages and disadvantages.
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You include examples about study, communication, and crime on the internet.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like However and Finally.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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