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Government should spend on transportation or better roads Both views and opinion

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Spending
governments
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government
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 funds is always a debatable issue.
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 some believe that it is better to invest
on
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in
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 public
transportation
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, others think that providing better
roads
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 is more beneficial. In my opinion that investment of
government
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the government
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 should be done on making more
roads
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. On one hand,
major
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a major
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 reason is that why people think governments should invest
on
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in
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 public
transportation
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 is traffic
cogestion
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congestion
. The public
transportation
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 allows people to travel less
om
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in
 their own vehicles
everyday
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every day
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.
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, traffic on the
roads
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 can be controlled in
far
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a far
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 better way.
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, it is
also
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 important to consider that investing
on
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in
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 more
roads
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 leads to smooth connectivity and fast travel. It helps people to save their crucial time and everyday stress.
This
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 means they can travel
more
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further
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 east to work and other places. In my opinion,
development
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the development
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 of more
roads
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 helps improve the infrastructure and economy of the country. It allows goods and services
transport
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to be transported
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 easily, which
assist
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assists
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 businesses to grow rapidly. In conclusion,
although
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 improving public
transportation
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 and developing more
roads
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both are
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are both
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 beneficial, in my view
roads
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 development should be
priority
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a priority
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 of
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the
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government's funds

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Answer both sides more fully. Say why public transport is good and why roads are good, then give your view clearly.
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Add one simple real example for each main idea. This will make your points stronger.
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Develop each body paragraph more. Right now, ideas are short and not fully explained.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words like on the one hand, on the other hand, for example, and therefore.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some parts are hard to follow because of word choice and grammar mistakes.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph and explain it before moving to the next point.
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You answered the question and gave your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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The main ideas are related to the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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