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Band 4.5

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The line graph demonstrate an iformation human from four nations which are from
south east asia
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Southeast Asia
.
the
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The
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 percentages are giving people who are living in
the
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apply
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large
during
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cities during
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 the
yeas of
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years
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 1970 to
2020
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2020,
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 including the prediction in next 20 years.
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overall
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Overall
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, from the highest information are those two nations
which
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are
malasia
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Malaysia
 and
indonesi
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Indonesia
.
their
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Their
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 people are mostly
are
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apply
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happy to
living
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live
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 in the
huse
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house
 city.
from
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From
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 the line grapgh we can see
thier
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their
 information are raise up in every 10 years,
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moreover malaysia
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Malaysia
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 is the highest
and
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, and
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indonesia
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Indonesia
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 is on
second
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the second
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 top level.
fristly
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Firstly
,
malaysia
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Malaysia
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 and
ioindonesia
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Indonesia
 are
likle
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likely
 the same
piont
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point
 when 1970,
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however
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however,
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 it was
big
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a big
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changed
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change
 from 2000
and
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, and
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 both of their population are
highest prediction
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predicted
 to
top
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reach the top
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 level
on
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by
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 2040 by the
contarst
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contrast
 that phillipppines is
fluctuated
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.
it
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It
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 has been decreased and
sligtly
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slightly
 increased to touch on the
piont
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point
 in 2040.
in
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In
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 the rest of thailand more steadily and slowly increased
in
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apply
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every
years
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year
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