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Band 2.5

The pictures below show how tea is produced. They also illustrate the process of making a cup of tea. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The pictures show stages of creating
a
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the
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tea
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 itself and the process of distribution, continued with the illustration of making the drink.
Overall
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,
tea
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 production is a linear, multi-staged process that begins with sowing and growing
tea
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 plants and processing
leafs
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leaves
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, during which
tea
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 is
being
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apply
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picked, withered, packed and delivered to
people home
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people's homes
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. That sequence is continued by a procedure of making a cup of
tea
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. In the first stage, seeds are being
sowed
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sown
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 in India and China, followed by
a
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apply
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plants being cultivated under
a
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the
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 sun.
Short
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Shortly
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 after,
leafs
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leaves
 are being harvested in buckets manually, withered under the sun, and after being
processed
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processed,
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 they are
subsequently
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 packaged into separate boxes, loaded on the lorry and distributed to retailers.
Following
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this
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, pictures describe a process of making a cup of
tea
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, which begins with customers purchasing
a
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apply
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dried
leafs
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leaves
 in a shop and delivering them to their homes.
Afterward
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Afterwards
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, water is
being
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apply
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prepared by
initially
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 pouring it into
kettle
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a kettle
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 and
boiled
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boiling it
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.
Then
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, a cup with
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tea
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a tea
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 bag is filled with water and
then
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 left for a few minutes. And after adding milk and assembling with sugar, you can enjoy your drink.

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Write the first line in a more clear way. Say what the pictures show in simple words.
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Your overview is there, and this is good. But make the main steps more exact and more easy to follow.
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Include all key steps with the right order and right detail. Some parts are not fully clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words like first, next, then, after that, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Put each stage in a clear group. One part for tea made and sent out, one part for making the drink.
coherence and cohesion
Check word forms and small grammar points, because they can make the line hard to understand.
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You gave an overview, which is very important in Task 1.
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You covered both parts of the pictures, not just one.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start and two main body parts.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas are in time order, so the reader can follow the process.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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