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Band 3

The plans below show a student room for two people and a student room for one person at an Australian university.

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The diagrams illustrate the layouts of
two
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 different types of student accommodation, one designed for a single occupant and the other for
two
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 people, at a university in Australia.
Overall
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, it costs $350 per week to rent the student
room
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 for
two
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 people
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while
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, while
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 the rate for
single-person
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a single-person
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room
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 is much lower, at $200 weekly.
Although
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 both rooms share the same length of 6 meters, the one for
two
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 people has a width of 4 meters, which is 1.5 meters wider than the other. The single
room
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,
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.
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 Upon entering, a relatively large bathroom is situated to the left, next to
book shelves
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bookshelves
 and a study desk. There is a bed in the upper
right
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corner
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, facing a cupboard which is next to bookshelves.
Whereas
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 the stove is located to the
right
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 of
entering
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the entrance
, alongside
sink
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the sink
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, microwave, and they are facing a table and chairs. Whilst
,
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apply
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 study
desk2
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desk 2
 is located in the middle of
television
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the television
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 on
wall
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the wall
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, and bed 2
which
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, which
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 is in
lower
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the lower
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right
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corner
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.
By comparison
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,
in
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a
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 student
room
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 for one person. These
two
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 rooms are similar in terms of bathroom, study desk, bed, and entrance. because they are located in almost
same
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the same
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 place.
Whereas
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, the stove is located in
lower
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the lower
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 left
corner
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, next to
sink
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the sink
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 and microwave
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 is facing
with
Change preposition
the
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 television on
wall
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the wall
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. There is a cupboard in
lower
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the lower
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right
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corner
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, facing
a
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the
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 bed.

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task response
Make the room names clear. At one point, you mix the one-person room and the two-person room.
task response
Give a clearer overview of the main differences, such as size, price, and key furniture.
coherence and cohesion
Group details by room in a more careful way. Write all about one room first, then the other room.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a simple and correct way. Do not use too many words like whereas and whilst in short parts.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence form and word order, because some lines are hard to follow.
task response
You include the main facts about price and size.
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You try to compare the two rooms, not just describe one room.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start and an overview.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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