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The bar chart below shows the production of the world’s oil in OPEC and non-OPEC countries. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The bar chart compares the
production
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 of the world’s
oil
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 in
OPEC
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,
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 other
and
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, and
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 middle east
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,
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 and
non-
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OPEC
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countries
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 throughout 1980 and 2020.
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, it is evident that
non-
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OPEC
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oil’s
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oil production has
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production
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 had considerably increased over the period, becoming the dominant figure,
whereas
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 the
production
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 of
oil
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 by
OPEC
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countries
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reduced
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 significantly. Between 1980 and 2000, other
OPEC
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countries
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 registered the highest figure at about 10
million
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,
while
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non-
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OPEC
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countries
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 accounted for the lowest
production
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 at around 2.5
million
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.
After
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 2000
until
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to
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 2010, the
production
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 of
oil
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 by other
OPEC
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countries
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 experienced a considerable decline
by
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of
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 5
million
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, reaching 5
million
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,
although
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middle east
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Middle East
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OPEC
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countries
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 started to
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production of
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produce
oil
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 at approximately 7
million
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.
By contrast
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,
non-
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OPEC
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countries
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 represented a significant rise, climbing from 2.5 to 7.5
million
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. In the period between 2010 and 2020,
non-
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OPEC
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countries
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 again registered a sharp growth, rising from 7.5 to around 16.5
million
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.
However
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, the
production
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 of
oil
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 in other and east middle
OPEC
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countries
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 decreased significantly, both reaching around 1.5
milion
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million
.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, oil, non-opec, countries, opec, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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