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The line graph gives information about the money spent on books to four different countries between 1995 and 2005.

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The line graph gives information about the money spent on books
to
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in
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 four different
countries
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 throughout the decade.
Overall
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, all
countries
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 have seen only
growth
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, meanwhile
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; meanwhile,
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 Australia has seen the most
growth
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, with more than double the rate.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 Italy experienced steady
growth
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 within the
period
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. Looking first at the big rises of Australia, the highest rate is 30$ in 1995 to 73$ in 2005, followed by
France
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has
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, which has
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 almost the same amount
at the end
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 of the
period
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 with 70$. Germany started at approximately $80
million
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 in 1995.
Although
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 the figure declined slightly to about $85
million
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 in 2003,
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nevertheless
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apply
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Germany
withnesses
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witnesses
 the highest rate among the other
countries
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 with 95$
at the end
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 of the
period
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. Meanwhile , Italy and
France
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also
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 experienced
overall
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growth
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. Italy began at about $50
million
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 and
flactuated
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fluctuated
 slightly during the first few years before rising steadily to around $60
million
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 in 2005.
France
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 showed a steady upward trend, increasing from around $55
million
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 in 1995 to $75
million
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 by the following years. In conclusion, all four
countries
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 spent more money on books over the decade. Australia saw
the
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a
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 significant increase,
while
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 Germany stayed dominant
at the end
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 of the
period
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.
Likewise
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,
France
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 and Italy rose steadily in the rest of the
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, overall".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, growth, period, france, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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