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Band 5

Electric cars will fully replace petrol and diesel-fuelled cars in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people believe that
eletric
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 car will completely replace petrol and diesel-fuelled
cars
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 in the future. I
also
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 agree that
this
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 is going to happen as a natural
changing
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change
 process. In fact, the replacement has already happened with most of the trains,
for example
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. A project designed by the European Union Transport Comission believe that 89% of trains
in
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 the continent will become electric by 2028. Studies reveal that
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eletric
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electric
cars
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 are less
harmfull
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harmful
 to the planet in comparison to petrol and diesel ones, exactly because they don't use these non-renewable sources. As one consequence,
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eletric
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electric
 vehicles reduce carbon footprint emissions and are eco-friendly. Another advantage
about
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 those
cars
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,
according to
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 specialists, is that they are easier to maintain
and
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 new researchers are
working now
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now working
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 on building faster and stronger
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eletric
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electric
 versions. Changes are not always for the best, though. Some modern products gain in technology but lose in lifespan. It is still
early
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 to
assure
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 that
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 is the case of
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cars
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.
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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 what is already known is that with all the projects and time invested
on
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in
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 the technology, they tend to become more
accesible
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accessible
 and improve the features. In my opinion,
this
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 replacement is a natural process, similar to what we've witnessed with analogic and digital cameras,
type machines
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typewriters
 and computers
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 so many other examples. Humanity is in a constant evolution
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 things are getting old-fashioned. What was part of our lives 10, 20, maybe 30 years ago
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 now part of museum collections. In conclusion,
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eletric
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electric
cars
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, in fact, are something society has been expecting
since
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for
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 a long time
ago
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. Old futuristic movies would think of these
cars
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 as the reality of the new century. I believe now we are
finally
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 being led to that.
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Eletric
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Electric
 vehicles are conquering their space and very soon will replace the petrol and diesel-fuelled ones.

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task response
Make your main answer more clear at the start. Say if you fully agree or only mostly agree, and keep this the same all through the essay.
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Add one or two more clear examples about cars, not trains, to support your ideas better.
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Explain the other side a bit more. You say change is not always best, but this part is short and not fully developed.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully. Some parts move well, but a few ideas jump too fast from one point to another.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph focused on one main idea. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are unclear or not complete in meaning. Make each point simple and direct.
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You answer the question and give a clear opinion in the essay.
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You include reasons why electric cars may replace old cars, such as less harm to the planet and easier care.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Most paragraphs follow a logical order, from main idea to support.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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