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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The data
represents
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represent
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 the amount of
potatoes
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 consumed and produced in different world regions as of 2006.
Overall
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, the greatest consumers are Europe
an
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and
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 North America, which take the first and the second largest amount of vegetables eaten respectively.
Conversely
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, the most significant contribution
in
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to
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 harvesting is made in Asia.
To begin
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 with, the
european
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European
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 population has the most significant demand
in
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for
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potatoes
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, which is recognised as 96.1 kg per person. North America shows remarkably
less number
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fewer numbers
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, which is estimated at the level of 57.9 kg per person. Asia and the rest of
Americas
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the Americas
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 show
more
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a more
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 moderate need, twice as low as the amounts consumed in
USA
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the USA
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 and Canada. The smallest share belongs to Africa, which consumed only 14.1 kg per person.
On the contrary
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, the most important source of the raw food is Asia, which
made
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produced
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 131.2 million tonnes of
potatoes
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 in the considered year.
However
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, Europe made
comparable
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a comparable
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 amount of
potatoes
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, which is 126.3 million tonnes as of the same year. The lowest production levels are experienced in South and Central America,
slighly
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slightly
 exceeding 15 million tonnes.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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