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The table and graph below show the number of international tourist and tourism revenue in four Asian countries between 2000 and 2014.

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The table compares the
number
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 of international
tourists
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 from 2000 to 2014 in four countries, namely
Thailand
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, South
Korea
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,
Singapore
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 and
Japan
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.
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 the line graph gives information about tourist income from 2000 to 2014.
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest
number
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 of
tourists
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 visited
Thailand
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 in 2014,
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and
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the lowest
number
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 of
tourists
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 visited
Japan
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 in 2000.
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, it is shown in the line graph that, over the period of time, all trends slightly increased. As the table shows, in 2000, the most
tourists
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 visited
Thailand
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 at 9,5
millions
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, but the least
number
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 of
tourists
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 visited
Japan
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 at 4,8
millions
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. 5,3
millions
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 and 7,7
millions
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 of
tourists
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 visited South
Korea
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 and
Singapore
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, respectively. Regarding 2005, the biggest figure was detected in
Thailand
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 at 11,6
millions
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. The
number
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 of
tourists
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 in South
Korea
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 and
Japan
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 was relatively similar at 6,0 and 6,7
millions
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, respectively. 9,0
millions
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 of
tourists
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 visited
Singapore
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. Coming to 2010, over the years
Thailand
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 remained highest peak of
tourists
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. The
number
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 of
tourists
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 in South
Korea
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 and
Japan
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 was relatively similar at 8,8
millions
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 and 8,6
millions
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.
However
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, in 2014, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 in South
Korea
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 and
Japan
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were
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 relatively similar at 14,2
millions
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 and 13,4
millions
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. 15,1
millions
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 of
tourists
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 visited
Singapore
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, thailand, korea, singapore, japan, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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