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Band 6.5

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

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The bar chart displays the statistics related to how families in one country allocated their weekly earnings in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, food was the most expensive category in 1968,
while
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for
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in
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 2018 it was leisure.
Additionally
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, spending on housing
almost
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has almost
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 doubled since 1968, and the proportion spent on household goods
remained
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has remained
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 the same. In 1968, families used to spend 35
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percent
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per cent
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 of their weekly income to buy food; in
2018
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2018,
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this
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 category nearly halved. Housing used to consume one-tenth of the families' weekly budget during 1968. It turned
to
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out to
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around
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be around
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 19
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2018. Fuel and power in 1968 showed a minor decrease in comparison to 2018, from around 7 to 4
percent
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 respectively. Clothing and footwear had a proportion similar to housing, but
in contrast
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 to housing,
its
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their
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 costs halved. Personal goods
costed
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cost
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 around 7.5
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percent
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per cent
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 of the weekly income, and it became half as much in 2018. Transport had the same expenditure as personal goods, but in 2018 it reached nearly 15
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percent
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per cent
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. Leisure spending was at around 8
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1968, and it more than doubled in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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