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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.

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The diagram
chart
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gives information about how
plastic
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bottles
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 are recycled.
Overall
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, the diagram illustrates a
process
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 that consists of several stages, beginning with
collection
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the collection
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 of
plastic
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bottles
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 and ending with
producing
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the production of
 end products. The
process
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 is linear, involving nine main steps to complete the
process
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. First of all, the
process
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 starts with the
bottles
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are
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 collected and distributed in
correct
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the correct
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 manner.
Then
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, the trucks transport the collected
bottles
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 to
recycling
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the recycling
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companie
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company
.
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this
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, in
recycling
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the recycling
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centre
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 the
bottles
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 are sorted
according to
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 a specific policy .After that, the
plastic
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bottles
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 are compressed together into block shapes.
Next,
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the whole blocks are put in a specific machine in order to wash them and break them into fine fragments
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. This
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this
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process
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 is called crushing the
plastic
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bottles
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. After completing these
inital
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initial
 stages, the
process
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 continues with all the
particule
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particles
 from the
plastic
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bottles
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are
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 loaded into a mixer and
plastic
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 pellets are produced. In the following step,
plastic
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 pellets are heated to produce raw material.
Next,
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raw materials are produced and sorted into boxes.
Finally
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, end products like pencil and
shirts
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, shirts
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 and
bottles
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 are produced successfully.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, ".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, bottles, process with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling
  • mitigate
  • environmental impact
  • landfills
  • conservation
  • sorted
  • residual waste
  • adhesives
  • shredded
  • pellets
  • manufacturing
  • ecological
  • economical
  • sustainable
  • automation
  • raw material
  • life cycle
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