In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents choosing to self-educate their children at home rather than sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

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donot
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do not
agree with the statement that the positive side of
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home schooling
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homeschooling
overrides the drawbacks of it against
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traditional
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. Prospectively
if
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, if
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a child wants to
persue
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pursue
professional
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such
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as
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, paramedical staff and
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professionals
so
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they must have
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highschool
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a high school
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certification and as today's
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necessity,
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both
parent's
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parents
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are working
full
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full-time
time
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jobs to
fullfill
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fulfil
their financial needs. They can not provide
best
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the best
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quality of education
simultaneously
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while
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being busy with their own careers.
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my perspective,
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home schooling
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homeschooling
can provide the basic education that a child needs for their early childhood development till the
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age. For
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highschool
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high school
certification in order to get
admit
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admission
in their
desire
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desired
graduate
schools
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, they need to be prepared
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this
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milestone
which
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is provided
from
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structural training which takesplace at traditional schooling system. In foundational years,
schools
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prepared students for their
highschool
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and
then
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highschools helps them to transition into respective career pathways. Another drawback that outweighs here is the busy and demanding career life of both parent's to meet the lifestyle expectations they have for
them
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themselves
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and their families. As a consequences they neglect and compromise spending quality
time
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with their kids. Lack of
time
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and energy reserves after
full
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full-time
time
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outdoor work creates parenting at
convinence
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convenience
and
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home school
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homeschooling
should not be the outcome of any
convinence
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convenience
as it is
pivotal
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thing that
cost
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their
children
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children's
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future. In
conclusion
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home schooling
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homeschooling
is
a
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innovative approach
but
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its drawback
favors
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structural institutional education as professional
degree's
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are
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fruit of the foundational years they spend all the way to
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highschool
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high school
.
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, the challenging routine of
parent's
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parents
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makes
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home
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homeschooling
schools
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difficult to completely replace
structural
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the structural
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framework of
schools
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.

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You give a clear opinion and keep it to the end.
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You cover both home education and school education.
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