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The following maps show some of the changes that have taken place in Dubai in recent decades. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps illustrate several developments that have occurred in
Dubai
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 over recent years. The maps compared to
Dubai
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 in the past and
present-day
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present day
. In the past
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,
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Dubai
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 was underdeveloped
in
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, in
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 the past and the
city
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 is currently modern. Nowadays,
Dubai
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 is highly developed
and
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, and
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 the
city
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 contains many skyscrapers. In the past, the area was largely undeveloped with only a few
buildings
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.
However
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, nowadays, many residential
buildings
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 and roads have been constructed. On top of
that
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that,
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 there are many cars and trees have
planted
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been planted
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so
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, so
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 the
city
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have
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has
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 different skyscrapers
such
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 as
,
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apply
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outlet
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outlets
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, branch
office, branch
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offices
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, shopping
centre
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centres
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, hotels and other
buildings
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. In the southern part of the area, several shops
was
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were
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 replaced by modern
buildings
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.
In addition
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, new roads and public facilities
constructed
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have been constructed
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furthermore
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; furthermore
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, compared to the past, the
city
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 centre has become significantly more developed, with more vehicles, larger roads and newly planted trees
lights
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. Lights
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 have
installed
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been installed
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and
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, and
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 the
city
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 has become much more attractive.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dubai, city, buildings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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