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You are going to work in another city for a year. A friend who lives there offered to help you find a place to live. Write a letter to your friend:  Express your gratitude to him/her  Describe the area that you want to live in  Explain what type of accommodation you are looking for

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Dear Jack, I hope you are doing well. I'
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 writing to tell you that I'
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 moving to another city for a year
due to
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 my work. I'
m
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 writing
this
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 to thank you for helping me to find a place to live, because I know it's extremely difficult for me to find
place
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a place
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 alone. As a newcomer, I have no idea which
house
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/
apartment
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 is
pocket friendly
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pocket-friendly
. Basically,
My
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my
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 office is in
the
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apply
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downtown in the city
center
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centre
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. So, I'
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 looking for
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house
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a house
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/
apartment
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 which is near
to
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apply
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my office
in
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apply
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downtown, and
benefical
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convenient
 for me to
go office by walk
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walk to the office
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.
As a result
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, It's not only
save
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saves
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 my money but
also
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save
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saves
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 time because if i will use public transport, I will be stuck in traffic congestion. I'
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 looking for a fully furnished single room
apartment
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house
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, which comes with all
amenties
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amenities
such
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 as
bed
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a bed
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, a refrigerator, a sofa and
with
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a
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 TV.
Moreover
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, make sure
grocery
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the grocery
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 store and medical service
should be
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are
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 near
to
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the
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house
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/
apartment
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. I'
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 looking forward to
hear to
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hearing
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 from you. Thanks, Manpreet

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coherence cohesion
Say your ideas in a more clear way. Some lines are hard to follow.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like and, so, because, and also.
task achievement
Check small word order and missing words to make the message more complete.
task achievement
Use a more natural letter style in some parts.
task achievement
You answer all three parts of the task.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph has one main idea.
task achievement
The tone is friendly and warm.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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