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The following maps show some of the changes that have taken place in Dubai in recent decades. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The given maps illustrate the changes that have taken place in Dubai over recent years.
It is clear that
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 the
area
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 has become significantly more developed.morover urbanised with a dramatic increase in the
number
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 of
skyscraper
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skyscrapers
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 and vehicles
and
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, and
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 modern
infrastructure
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infrastructure,
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 the roads have been widened
On
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. On
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 top of that, more
trees
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 were planted.
,
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apply
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the
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The
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area
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 has changed and developed considerably compared to the past On the one
hand
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 the maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 a relatively undeveloped
area
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the
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. The
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area
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 contained only a few skyscrapers
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,
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but only a small
number
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 of buildings had been constructed
, morever
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. Moreover
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, only a
bigest
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large
number
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 of
trees
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 had been planned “
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, the roads were considerably less
crowded
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busy
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, and large open spaces could be seen on both sides of the streets. The Clock Tower was located in the centre of the roundabout and was surrounded by greenery.
One
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On
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 the other hand,
By
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by
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 now, the
area
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 has become far more developed,
for example
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,many skyscrapers and a large
number
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 of buildings
had
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have
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 been constructed.
but
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But
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 the roads were considerebly more crowded on top of that,
big
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a large
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number
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 of
trees
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 had been planned
but
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, but
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 A
number
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 of
trees
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 were removed to make way for new developments

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, number, trees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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