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Some people say that at all levels of education, from primary school to university, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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education
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, many people are
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 that all levels of coaching
primary
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 academic to colleges,
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 their time on learning facts
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 not on their practical
skills
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. They think that learning facts is more essential
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than
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 practical
skills
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. In my
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 I agree with
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 my opinion will be discussed in
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further
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a further
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 paragraph with a suitable conclusion. Supporting my agreement to the given statement, I firmly believe that
education
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 is
foundation
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the foundation
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 of a successful society. But I believe that practical
skills
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is
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are
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 more essential and
usefull
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useful
 for students who
reads
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read
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 in any levels of coaching schools to universities. Because it gives more knowledge to
student
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students
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 and
improve
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improves
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 their
skills
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.
example
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 per a report of
education
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 department of
india
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, 90% of schools and universities teach their students both learning and practical
skills
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. Explaining some of the
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other
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 in favour of
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 statement, it is true that, in science, practical
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work
 is very important .
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, if a medical student is trying to memorise the theory of
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, but his instructor does not tell him how to perform it, the student will completely fail in future
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lack
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a lack
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 of practical
skills
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. In conclusion, a lot of people believe that in
education
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learning
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, learning
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 facts
are
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is
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 not necessary
but
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, but
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 practical
skills
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 are more necessary
but
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 a lot of academic and college
can't
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programs can't
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 do that. I believe that
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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are
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apply
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strongly
supporting
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support
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 my viewpoint.

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Give a clear answer from the start and keep the same view all through the essay.
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Explain each main idea more. Say why it is true and how it helps students.
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Use real and clear examples. One strong example is better than one short example.
coherence and cohesion
Make one main idea for each body paragraph.
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Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
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Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You answered the question and gave your opinion.
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You used an introduction and a conclusion.
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Your second body paragraph has a clear example about medical study.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • practical skills = skills for real life and work
  • factual knowledge = information and facts
  • hands-on learning = learning by doing
  • real-world tasks = tasks from daily life or jobs
  • solve problems = find answers to difficult situations
  • work in a team = do a task with others
  • manage time = use time well
  • communication skills = ability to speak and write clearly
  • core knowledge = basic and important knowledge
  • job interview = meeting for a job
  • daily life = normal life every day
  • book knowledge = knowledge from books, not action
  • apply knowledge = use knowledge in real situations
  • life skills = useful skills for everyday living
  • academic subjects = school subjects like math, science, and history
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