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Studying abroad is thought by many students to be the best way to get a good education. On the other hand, On the other hand, some students believe that studying in another country has many drawbacks. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Undoubtedly, foreign education is the best way to get a good education, as some people believe.
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, others think that negative results can not be neglected.
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this
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 can have a positive impact, it can
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 be detrimental in certain contexts. There are many reasons
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 that identify higher education from foreign countries can
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 to
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 better future. The first and foremost is that
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 one can gain more
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confidence

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Write a full answer to both sides of the topic. Give your own view clearly.
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Add one clear main idea in each body part and explain it more.
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Use one or two simple examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Make your essay plan clear: introduction, two body parts, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You show both sides of the topic from the start.
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Your opening has a clear general topic sentence.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use linking words like however and although.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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