Studying abroad is thought by many students to be the best way to get a good education. On the other hand, On the other hand, some students believe that studying in another country has many drawbacks. Discuss both views and give your opin ion.

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Many students think that for better education they have to study in
foreign
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country.
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few
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pupil
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argue that going for education in another country has a lot of disadvantages.
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essay will examine both views and explain why I believe that studying
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abroad
has many cons,
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as isolation and loneliness. To recapitulate,
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many young people think that
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studying
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give
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them
best
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education because of high facilities and more opportunities, it has a lot of drawbakes including less interaction with people and
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life.

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Write more. Your essay is far too short, so you do not fully answer the task.
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Discuss both sides clearly. Now, you mainly give one side only.
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Give your opinion in a full and clear way. Say why you think this.
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Add one or two real examples to support each main idea.
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Use a clear 4-part plan: intro, side 1, side 2, conclusion.
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Put one main idea in each body paragraph.
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Use linking words well, like however, for example, on the one hand, and in conclusion.
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Check repeated words and small grammar errors, because they make your ideas hard to follow.
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You do try to answer the question and give your opinion.
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You mention both views, even though the ideas are very short.
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You have an intro and a short ending.
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Your main point is easy to see: you think study abroad has many bad points.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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