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Some Universities in less developed countries hire professors from well-known universities to improve the quality of education. Some believe that this is not a perfect solution and there are other ways to enhance the quality of education. DO you agree or disagree?

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Some
universities
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less-improved
 areas hire professors from well-known
universities
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 to increase the quality of education.Many individuals suggest that
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 is not a good solution
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 there are other ways to encourage the quality of education.I completely disagree
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 view. On the one hand,hiring famous professors can help for a short time cause they bring new teaching methods,
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 subject perspective and maximum knowledge.Students and local teachers should improve their knowledge from them.
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,it is often not a perfect long-term answer
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 many foreign researchers may not stay only for a short time.
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also be a
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.A professor from high level
universities
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 may be extra smart, yet may not fully understand central
students
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 needs,
school
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the school
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 system,or
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 market.
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universities
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 erect basic
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 of education
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 as libraries,labs,networking and class size.Credential teachers alone cannot do much if schools do not have rigth tools. From my
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 a better way
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 in local teachers.Governments and
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 can give training,better pay,and chances to study abroad,
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 local staff can grow and stay for many years.

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Make your main view more clear in the first part. Write: I completely disagree with this view.
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Add one or two clear examples to support your ideas, such as training local teachers or improving labs and books.
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Explain your points more fully. Some ideas are good, but they are short and not fully developed.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer linking words between ideas, like First, Also, However, and In my view.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph stay on one main idea. This will help the essay feel more easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence connections. Some parts are hard to follow because the grammar breaks the flow of ideas.
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You answer the question and give a clear side.
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You include both the short good side and the long-term problems.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic paragraph plan with an introduction, body, and ending idea.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words such as On the one hand, However, On the other hand, and Furthermore.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • short-term solution
  • long-term improvement
  • high standards
  • subject knowledge
  • teaching methods
  • local teachers
  • teacher training
  • better pay
  • study abroad
  • language barrier
  • cultural difference
  • local needs
  • school system
  • job market
  • lasting change
  • limited budget
  • education quality
  • learning environment
  • modern facilities
  • exchange program
  • online courses
  • joint research
  • practical solution
  • sustainable development
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