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Nowadays, more and more foreign students are going to English-Speaking countries to learn the “international” language-English. It is undoubtedly true that studying English in an English speaking country is the best way, but it is not the only way to learn it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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Introduction
Nowadays,more and more foreign
students
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 are going to
English
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-Speaking
countries
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 to learn the “international”
language
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-
English
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. I totally agree with
this
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 statement for many resones:
students
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 can improved there
English
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accent
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 and
students
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 can able to learn the
language
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 more fast. In
this
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 essay we will discces these resones in detials.
Body · 1
To begin
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 with,
students
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 can improved there
English
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language
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accent
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. In other world, the
English
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accent
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 is not easy because they should exercrises to much that why they go to
English
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countries
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 to learn there
accent
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. Just like my uncle Ahmed, he travel to UK to study the
English
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language
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 after he end his
English
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accent
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 become exellent. When he talk to me in
english
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 I thougt is Britch man not my uncle.
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, the
students
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 will not be able to for get the
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.
Body · 2
Another point to consider,
students
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 can able to learn the
language
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 more fast in
English
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countries
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.
In addition
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, the
english
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language
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 books is more stronger than another
countries
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.
For example
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, some people can use the
language
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 perfect with short time almost 6 month
while
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 in other
countries
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 just like Bahrain we need to study
English
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language
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 almost 12 years of education.
Conclusion
In the end, student can travel to learn
English
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language
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 in
countries
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 that
English
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 is international
language
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. I advice that all
countries
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 improves their methodogy in
English
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 to much is easy to
students
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 are not able to travel to another
countries
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task response
Give a more clear answer to the question. You say you fully agree, but you also say it is not the only way. Keep one line all through the essay.
task response
Add one more clear idea about why learning in an English-speaking country helps, or why other ways can also work. This will make your answer more full.
task response
Use examples with more detail. Your uncle example is good, but explain how living there helped him day by day.
coherence and cohesion
Put your ideas in a more simple order: intro, point 1, point 2, end. Start each body part with one main idea sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words well, like first, also, for example, and in the end. Be careful not to use too many.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects to the one before it. Some parts jump too fast, so the reader may get lost.
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You answer the topic and give your opinion from the start.
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You give two main reasons, and this helps your essay stay on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You use an introduction, body parts, and an ending, so the essay has a clear basic shape.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like to begin with, moreover, and in the end.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foreign students
  • international language
  • best way
  • alternative ways
  • online resources
  • language exchange programs
  • immersion
  • practical application
  • beneficial
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