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Today food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend？

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Introduction
Nowadays fully travels
thousand
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thousands
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 of
meals
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miles
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 from the farm to the consumers. We will see the positive
trend
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 and
negative
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the negative
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trend
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. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it positive
trend
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.
Body paragraph 1
When people
informed
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are informed
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 do
food
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and
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from
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 some
managers
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managers,
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 buy it from them they will have money
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. This
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this
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 is a good way for them
even
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, even
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 if it's difficult
to
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for
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 them to travel
for
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a long distance with the
food
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but
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 it's a good small shop because maybe they don'
t
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 have a lot of money for
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this
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this,
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 they start doing
food
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 and
sale
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sell
it's
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it to
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 four
peoples
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people
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 with
the
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high quality.
Body paragraph 2
In contrast
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, there
is
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are
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also
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 negative
things
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things,
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 maybe they didn'
t
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 save the
food
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 in the best way to travel thousands
miles
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of miles
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 or didn'
t
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 have
delivery
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a delivery
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 service for the shop or
coffees
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coffee
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.
While
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,
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apply
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the managers for the coffee shop would like to buy from high and more productive and 
flexibility
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flexible
 farms more than any farm
didn'
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that didn't
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t
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 have
comfort
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a comfortable
 method
to
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for
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 them.
Conclusion
In the end,
my opinion
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apply
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I think it's a good
trend
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 for nowadays, but no one know whats the new
trend
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come
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will bring
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 to us.

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Answer both parts more clearly. Say why food goes far and say why you think it is good or bad.
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Use clear main ideas in each body part. One part for reasons, one part for good and bad points.
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Add simple examples. For example, shops buy food from far farms because they want low cost or food out of season.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence easy to follow. Use short sentences with one idea each.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in the right way: First, Also, However, For example, In the end.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with a short reason or example so the reader can understand it well.
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You gave your opinion and kept it to the end.
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You tried to talk about both good and bad sides.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a beginning, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
You used some link words like 'In contrast' and 'In the end'.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer = person who buys things
  • global trade = buying and selling between countries
  • transport = moving goods from one place to another
  • supply = the amount of something available
  • local farmers = farmers in your area or country
  • imported food = food brought from another country
  • fresh produce = fruit and vegetables
  • cold storage = a cool place to keep food fresh
  • lower cost = less money needed
  • environmental damage = harm to nature
  • fuel use = the amount of oil or gas used
  • packaging waste = extra paper, plastic, and boxes thrown away
  • seasonal food = food available only at some times of the year
  • food choice = the range of food people can buy
  • compete with = try to do better than others in business
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