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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030

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The given graph illustrates the individuals using various types of vehicles for touring in the United Kingdom
between
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over the past
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 10 years.
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, it is crystal clear that
,
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bus
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buses
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 recorded the highest figure, more than double that of
bicycle
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bicycles
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. The remaining three categories
motorbike
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, motorbike
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, air, and
rail
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rail,
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 were followed by
middle
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a middle
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 proportion of
total
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the total
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. On the one hand, passengers prefer to
journed
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travel
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 by bus
dominated
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, which dominated
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that witnessed
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with
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 43 billion
kilometres
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 in 1990,
whereas
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 in
same
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the same
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 year bicycle stood at approximately less two times.
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, compared with rail,
this
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 type of machines roughly
same
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the same
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 in 2000,
which
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with
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 both of two used by individual 45
bilion
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billion
kilometres
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. In terms of motorbike and air, the amount of
kilometres
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are
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is
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 dwarfed
the
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by the
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 given both years,
means
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meaning
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 that they are shown under
the
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apply
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20
bilions
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billion
kilometres
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. Motorbike was
utlized
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utilised
 10
kilometres
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(
bilion
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billion
) , whilst reverse with air in 1990.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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