Some cities have vehicle-free days, when private cars, trucks, motorcycles are banned in the city center. Public transportation like buses, taxis and metros are advised. To what extent do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Some countries have
vechicle-free
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vehicle-free
days, when
privite
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private
cars
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,
trucks
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,
motor-bikes
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and motorbikes
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are banned in the downtown. Only public transportation
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as buses, taxis and metros
are
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is
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permitted. For me,
this
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can have
a
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an
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advantage for some
people
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to make them more mobile, if there are any damages
in
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to
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their private
cars
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one
day
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. But the disadvantages become more
,
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apply
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when some private workers and businesses depend completely on their
trucks
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to transfer significant products,
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as medical
equipments
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equipment
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. So
this
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can have negative
consequnces
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consequences
on a
lot
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of
people
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at
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in
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the end than
his
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its
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advantages.
Body · 1
Firstly
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, some
people
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can be immobile without their
cars
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, or if they have any
damages
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damage
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. So those
people
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may not attend
meeting
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meetings
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or go to their universities, because of
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damage. But, during
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cars-free
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car-free
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days, they can learn how to be more
flexiable
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flexible
without their
cars
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, when they have them in their yards. But they cannot be able to drive them, so they have only one solution
to
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: to
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go by bus. And
these
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this
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period is more than one
day
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.
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, those
people
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may not have
chance
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a chance
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except
go
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to go
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by public
transportition
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transportation
,
for example
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. So, they can learn to be independent without their
cars
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. Unconsciously, they can
relise
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realise
the
differeance
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difference
after
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this
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period, how they become more able to go anywhere.
Body · 2
Meanwhile, some
people
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utterly depend on their private
cars
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for
working
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work
. Especially,
trucks
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that can carry a
lot
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of products, when they transfer these products
for
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to
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hospitals or grocceries
also
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other factories.
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,
trucks
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that carry medical
equipments
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equipment
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for hospitals
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such
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, such
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as blood or
surgries
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surgical
tools. When
a
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an
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accident or a surgury happen
this
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day
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and
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, and
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they need
for
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the
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tools that come by these
trucks
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. So a
lot
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of problems can happen for
people
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and factories, because of
this
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day
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.
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Also
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some
people
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try to earn from their private
cars
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and
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, and
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they work on UBER company. So those
people
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cannot be able to move during those days. So, some of them can be affected
from
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by
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this
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. When they have children, pills, or daily
needs
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needs,
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they must pay for all of them daily.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I think
this
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can have
a
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apply
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good advantages for
people
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to make them independent
on
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of
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themselves without their
cars
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. But,
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this
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these
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disadvantages can be higher, when a
lot
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of factories and
people
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depend completely on the transferring
equipments
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equipment
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by their
trucks
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. Other
people
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work
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who work
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also
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rely on their private
cars
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. So, those
people
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can be harmed and
also
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others with them.
Surly
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Surely
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, it has more
drawback
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drawbacks
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than
his
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its
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merits.

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task response
Make your main answer more clear in the first part. Say early that the bad points are stronger than the good points.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each body part on one main idea only. This will make your essay easier to follow.
task response
Explain your examples more. Show clearly how one result leads to another result.
coherence and cohesion
Use link words in a simple way, like first, also, however, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same idea about cars and trucks many times. Add one or two strong points only.
task response
Make sure every point answers the question about advantages and disadvantages, not only general problems.
task response
You give a clear opinion that the disadvantages are bigger.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You try to use examples about hospitals, factories, and drivers.
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