An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

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Introduction
These days, online shopping has become increasingly common
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people.
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time and
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isolation, and
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suggest solutions to buy local products,
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awareness through campaigns and giving discounts.
Conclusion
To recapitulate,
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people choose online shopping
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it provides more convenience and saves time
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some drawbacks including isolation and loneliness, these could be
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by providing good
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and
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awareness through media and news.

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Write all parts of the task. You need one clear part about good points for people, one about bad points for people and companies, and one about how to help local shops.
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Add more support for each main idea. For example, explain how online shopping saves time, and say why it may hurt local business.
coherence and cohesion
Use one full body paragraph for each main point. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a clear way. Use simple words like first, also, however, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Do not end too soon. Your essay now has only an opening and an end, so the reader cannot see full development.
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You answered the topic in a general way and showed the main parts of the question.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a conclusion, which gives your writing a basic shape.
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Some main ideas are clear, such as saving time, isolation, campaigns, and discounts.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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