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Many people think that the government should spend money to explore life in the outer space, while others think that this is a waste of public money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. (10th Jan) (AC)*

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Introduction
Nowadays, telecommuting and working from home have become
incresingly
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increasingly
 popular since 2019. One major advantage is that employees can save both time and money because they do not need to travel to work every day.
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 addition, companies can reduce their expenses by avoiding office rental
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 and other workplace expenses.
Conclusion
On the other hand
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, working from home
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 has some disadvantages. People may have fewer opportunities for face-to-face communication and social interaction, which can lead to feelings of isolation and
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loneliness
. As a
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,
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 may negatively affect their mental health and
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 well-being.

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Write a full answer. You need an introduction and a clear end.
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Answer all parts of the question. If the task asks for both sides and your opinion, write all three.
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Add one or two clear examples to support each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like First, Also, On the other hand, and In the end.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph about one main point only.
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Check small word errors like big letters, spelling, and word form.
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Your ideas are easy to understand.
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You show one good point and one bad point.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphing.
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You use simple linking words well, such as On the other hand and As a result.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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