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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of exported pineapples by the three main producing countries
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over two distinct years, 2009 and 2019,
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 the pie chart compares the sub-division of the cost to the consumer
per
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 each
pineapple
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. What stands out the most from the graph is the tremendous growth experienced by
Country
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 A, that become the major producer of
pineapple
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 in
2019
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 accounting for ten
millions
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million
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 metric tons of goods exported, exceeding
by far
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Country B by far
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Country
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 B. Distribution and retail is the category that holds the highest rate in the cost of a single
pineapple
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, far from the second segment, Profit, by 17 percentage points;
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 categories fractions
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 as Import licences and International transport represent the mid-cluster range, accounting for respectively 12% and 10%. Turning again to the bar chart, it is notable a substantial decline in
pineapple
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 exports for
Country
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 B, passing from over 4
millions
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to just under 2
millions of
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million
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 metric tons,
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Country
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 C remains at the lowest in both years, never exceeding the threshold of 1 million
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metric tons
exportation
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of exportation
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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