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The map below shows the development of an area between 1995 and the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map illustrates the improvement of an
area
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 between 1995 and the
recent days
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present day
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.
Overall
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, the housing areas are extending
than
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more than
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 in the first
of
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part of
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 the period.
Also
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,
farm
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the farm
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 and the
park
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 are replaced
golf
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by golf
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 and tennis courts below.
Fishing
Correct article usage
The fishing
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 port is completely deleted. The hotel
remain
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remains
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 the same, but near it there is the new car
park
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. First of all, in the
west
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 of the
area
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, from the north, houses were
little
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few
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 in the middle of the
area
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. So, now, they have
additional two
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two additional
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 houses, with
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road
Correct article usage
a road
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come
Wrong verb form
coming
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 from the
west
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connect
Wrong verb form
connecting
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 to the main
road
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. In the north, from the main
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road
Add a comma
road,
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there is
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apply
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a new accomadition is added to the old three, in the
west
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. By the far east, the farm land and the big forest
park
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 are replaced with
higher
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a higher
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 golf
area
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, and small tennis courts below. Under them, the hotel
remain
Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
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 unchanged, but there is a new small car
park
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is
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apply
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beside the hotel. South, turn the
road
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, the cafe stays the same. In front of them, the fishing port is
deleted
Verb problem
gone
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,
now
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and now
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 the sea has the whole of the space.
West
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from
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of
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 the sea, shops and fish market are replaced with
restaurant
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restaurants
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 from the north, and south, new apartments are added.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, park, west, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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