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The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia from three countries in 1995 and 2005, and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005.

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The charts below show the number of tourists to Australia from three countries in 1995 and 2005, and the types of travels between 1995 and 2005.
The charts illustrate how many tourists travelled to Australia from the US,
UK
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, and
Japan
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 in 1995 and 2005, and the varieties of travel in 10-years period.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the bar chart,
while
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 the
UK
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 and the US had the same
quantities
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number
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 of travellers in 2005,
Japan
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 showed the highest numbers in 1995. In terms of the line chart, staying at resorts experienced a pronounced growth,
whereas
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 backpacking demonstrated a downward trend. In 1995
UK
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 showed 800.000 tourists heading to Australia, whilst from
US
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the US
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, more than 400.000 people travelled to Australia.
On the other hand
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,
Japan
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 had the highest amount, illustrating over 1.400.000 people.
In contrast
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, in 2005,
Japan
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 depicted relatively smaller numbers(100.000). Surprisingly, the
UK
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 and the US had identical numbers of tourists, which is 1.400.000. Observing the line chart, backpacking experienced a noticeable increase from 1995 to 2000(2.200.000).
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, after five years, it observed a drop to 1.200.000. Another type , which is staying at resorts, began with only 400.000 people. Compared to backpacking, it experienced a substantial rise, levelling off with backpacking
at the end
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 of 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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