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Some people believe that lowering the speed limit will lead to maximum road safety. Other people believe that there are many other ways to improve road safety. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Introduction
Since motor
veheicles has
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vehicles have
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 been using as transportation, there are
increasing
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an increasing
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lots
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number
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 of motor
veheicles accident
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vehicle accidents
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 every single days which cause lots of opeple died or
injured
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be injured
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.
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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while
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 some believe that controlling
lower
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apply
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the speed
limit
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 will lead to maximum
road
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safety
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, others believe that there are
mumeous
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many
 other
ways
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 to improve
road
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safety
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. Lowering the speed
limit
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 might be helped the
road
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safety
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.
However
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, there are many
ways
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 to improve
road
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safety
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such
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, such
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 as
educaional
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educational
 campaigns
,
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apply
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 practice defensive driving habits . I believe that the latter is not only better enhanced for
road
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safety
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 but
also
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more
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a more
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 effective way in general.
Body · 1
There is no
daubt
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doubt
 lowering the speed
limit
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 will lead to great help
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road
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in road
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safety
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. The sign for
speed
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the speed
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limit
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 can help
driver
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drivers
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 remain
safe
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at safe
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 speeds.
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, always obey
local
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the local
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 speed
limit
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, especially
, school zone
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in school zones, which
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that is
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 great helpul for protecting kids who
just
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have just
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 got
off from the
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out of
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 school.
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, lowering the speed
limit
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it is
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does
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 not
gerantee
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guarantee
 maximum
road
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safety
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 because some people who
are
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apply
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lack
of
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apply
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carefulness or drunk or even
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under the influence of drugs
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drugs
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drugs,
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 ignore
speed
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the speed
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limit
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.
Body · 2
Other people
says
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say
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 that there are
numeous
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numerous
ways
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 to improve
road
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safety
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. The
educaional
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educational
 campaigns play the key role in preventing crashes before they
unespected
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unexpectedly
 happen through media or tv etc.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, people have to practice
self defensive
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self-defensive
 driving habits.
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, don't drive
close
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too close
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between
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to other
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 cars,
flowing
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follow
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 the traffic regulation rules and do not drive when sober.
Conclusion
Sum it up, the lowering speed
limit
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 will not only lead to
be
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apply
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road
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safety
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, but
also
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 defensive driving habits and educational campaigns
etc
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, etc.,
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ways
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 to
enhence
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enhance
 the
road
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safety
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 as well.

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task response
Answer both sides more clearly. Write one clear idea for why lower speed can help, and one clear idea for other ways to make roads safe.
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Give your opinion in a simple direct way in the introduction and the conclusion, and keep the same view all through the essay.
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Add more clear support for each main point. Explain how each way helps road safety.
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Use one easy example that is real and clear, not too general.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main idea only. This will help the essay feel easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, however, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some sentences are hard to follow because the words are not in a clear order.
coherence and cohesion
Make the end of each paragraph connect to the next idea more smoothly.
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You answer the topic and talk about both views.
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You give your opinion and keep it near the main idea of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like however, for example, and therefore.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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