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Many people think that people cannot help everyone so they should be concerned about their community and country . Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
Nemors
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 people
beileve
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believe
 that people can not help everyone , so they must be concerned about their community. In my
oppinoin
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opinion
, it
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 on you , and who is the person you will help ,
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addition,
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are you can
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can you
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 help him
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it wil pe prusser
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will it be pressure
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 on you ?
Body paragraph 1
To start with
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 , wich it you do not
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have
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abelity
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ability
 to help all people , and that has a lot of
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reasons
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such
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 as you do not know
every thing
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everything
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 you can not solve all
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,
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 you are not
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, you
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 power
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 when it finsh you
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 do
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anything
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finish
 after one problem .
Body paragraph 3
But what about
concerned
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being concerned
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 for your community ,
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slotion
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solution
 has both
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pros
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cons
,
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 as it will damage your
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relationships
, on otherwhise it can help you to
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focus
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your self
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yourself
 and use your energy for
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yourself. In addition
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,
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 it can help you to discover your hopy or it can make you
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lonely
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Conclusion
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end
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 it
depend
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depends
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 on your
carecter
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character
, and what you can do or how much energy you
has
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have
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Answer the question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this same idea all through the essay.
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Explain your main ideas more. Some points are very short, so the reader cannot fully understand your meaning.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer plan: introduction, body 1, body 2, and conclusion. This will help your essay feel more organized.
coherence and cohesion
Link your ideas with simple words like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea. Now some ideas are mixed together.
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You give your opinion in the introduction and again in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has paragraphs, which is a good start for clear writing.
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You try to look at both sides of the topic, which shows thinking.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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