The graph below gives information on the numbers of particpants for a different activiities at one social centre in melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

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The line graph illustrates five activities

which was

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that were

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participated in Australia in 2000-2020.

Overall

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, three activities showed an increase, one remained stable, and one decreased.

To begin

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with, three categories

namely

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, namely

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film club, table tennis, and musical

performances

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performances,

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went up starting

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from 65

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, 18, and 0

respectively

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, respectively

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

46 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

the number of participants
take part in
went up
went down
rose slowly
fell slightly
grew quickly
stayed the same
remained stable
reached a peak
hit the lowest point
was higher than
was lower than
showed an increase
showed a decrease
over the period
at the beginning
at the end
in contrast
while
by comparison

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