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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Tha
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The
 given bar chart
illustrate
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 the levels of
air
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pollution
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 caused by
electricity
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 generation,industry and transportation among four countries in the year of 2021. The measures
is
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are
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 used in
PPM
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.
Overall
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,the most
level
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 of
air
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pollution
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 were in China,as opposed to Austrailia who got the lowest levels.The main cause in the majority seems to be industrial
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effect
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,
while
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electricy
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electricity
 had less
affect
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effect
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.
Chines
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Chinese
 people consumed the most of these triggers
causing
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, causing
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 roughly 80
PPM
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 of
air
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pollution
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 by the industry.
Although
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there
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their
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 lowest
were
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was
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 around approximately 60
PPM
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 caused by the use of
electricity
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,
comparing
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compared
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 to other countires the most used of
electricity
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were
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was used
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 in
china
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China
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.
In contrast
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,Australia has the lowest
level
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 of
air
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pollution
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between
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among
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 the four countries
,
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;
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 the highest
level
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were
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was
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 caused by generating
electricity
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reached
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, which reached
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 a
level
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bellow
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below
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 20
PPM
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.
On the other hand
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hand
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,the Americans used
transportaion
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transportation
 more than the Japanese, affecting the
air
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 by ( around 60
PPM
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 and 30
PPM
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 respectively).Japanese caused
air
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pollution
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 mostly from
industial
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industrial
 factors reaching a
level
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 of nearly 45
PPM
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, electricity, ppm, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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