The map below shows 2 possible sites (S1 and S2) of a new supermarket planned for the town of GARLSDON.

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The map illustrates two potential places for building a supermarket in Garlsdon town.
Overall
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, both suitable sites are near
to
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an
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industrial
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area
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area,
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where
site
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2 is surrounded by the industry and
site
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1 is outside of the industry.
However
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, both are comparatively far from housing .
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with,
site
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1 is situated in a countryside
area
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and approximately 12 km from the Hindon population.
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, it is between the main roads and Rail line.
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,
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apply
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it is a bit farther from the residential
area
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compared to
commercial
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the commercial
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area
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. Altogether, it is well accessible for ten thousand residents all around.
On the other hand
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,
site
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2 is located in the centre of the town beside the main roads , which is connected
commercial
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to the commercial
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zone
as well as
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the countryside. To sum
almost
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up
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, it is easy access for 15,000 population and 16 km from the people who live in the Barnsdon
area
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, site with synonyms.
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