Computer Games are very popular in all ages and nationalities. Parents think, it has a little educational value and more harmful. Discuss your opinion with examples.

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Games
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inportant
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. It has both positive and negative effects on
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. Some
games
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are very informative rather than harmful. For
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, a game was launched with the name of GtA Voice
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. Kids showed very
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interest
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while
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it has very positive effects
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a it gives idea
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how to fight in difficult situations
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The characters in that game
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how to do teamwork and make minds sharp. Some
games
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help children think, solve small problems, and learn to work with others.
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, puzzle
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can train the brain, and language
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can teach new words. Online team
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can
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help players talk and plan together.
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, computer
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can be harmful when children play too much. They may spend less time
on study
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,
sleep
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, and
family talk
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. Some
voilent
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violent
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may make young people less sensitive to real pain.
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children
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who plays all night may feel tired at school and get low marks. I believe computer
games
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are not all bad, but parents are right to worry.
Games
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have educational values in some cases, yet the harm is greater if there is no time limit or adult control. The best way is to choose good
games
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and keep a clear limit on play time.
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,
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has positive effect on minds if it plays for mind
relaxing
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relaxation
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Write a clear first line that answers the topic in a direct way.
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Give one main idea in each body part and explain it more.
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Use examples with clear detail, not only names of games.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and so.
coherence and cohesion
Check word order and full stops so each sentence is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in one sentence and do not repeat the same point.
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You answer both good and bad sides of games.
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Your ending gives your own view and advice for parents.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear middle and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some link words like however, for example, and in contrast.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational value
  • harmful effects
  • time limit
  • adult control
  • solve problems
  • team work
  • learn new words
  • violent games
  • low marks
  • less time for study
  • sleep problems
  • real life
  • good influence
  • bad influence
  • clear rules
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