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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, we can read a lot of news and
books
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 online, covering almost any topic we are interested in or would like to explore, often without paying anything.
While
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 some
people
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 believe that printed
books
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 are unlikely to disappear completely, others argue that the rapid growth of online reading will eventually replace physical
books
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. In my opinion, I strongly believe that printed
books
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 will continue to exist and
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are unlikely
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 to disappear.
Firstly
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,
although
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 e-
books
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 are highly portable, and a single device can store thousands of
books
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, online reading with electronic devices can be challenging for elderly
people
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 or for those with limited technological knowledge.
In addition
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, printed
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 can be read
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in
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 a natural environment where there are no batteries, electronic devices,
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or
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 electricity. Many
readers
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readers,
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 especially elderly
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readers,
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 often find printed
books
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 more comfortable for long reading sessions because there is no screen glare, making
reading
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the reading
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 experience more relaxing and easier on the eyes.
Secondly
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, e-
books
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 may raise privacy concerns and lack physical qualities that many readers value.
For example
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, when using Kindle, Amazon may collect information about a user’s identity, reading habits, reading speed, and the amount of time
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spent on a page or a book.
In contrast
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,
people
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 can read printed
books
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 privately without having their reading activities monitored.
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, many
people
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 appreciate printed
books
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 as physical objects. They enjoy certain aspects
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 as texture, smell, weight, and appearance of
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 on their shelf.
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, printed
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 are
also
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 considered
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valuable
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cultural
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 items,
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a symbol
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 of education, and intellectual development. In conclusion, I simply disagree with the statement that nobody will buy printed
books
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 in the future because online reading is becoming more popular. Printed
books
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 and newspapers will continue to be valuable for
people
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 who enjoy reading, appreciate literature, and prefer not to depend on electronic devices.
Moreover
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, printed materials remain especially useful in rural areas or
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 where access to electricity and technology is limited.

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task response
For task response, your answer is clear, but the question talks about both newspapers and books. You wrote much more about books. Add more ideas about newspapers too.
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For task response, your opinion is clear from the start, and this is good. To get a higher score, explain your side a bit more deeply in each body part.
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For task response, your example about Kindle is good and specific. Try to add one more real example about newspapers or free online news.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear 4-part structure: intro, 2 body parts, and conclusion. This helps the reader follow your ideas well.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, most ideas connect well with words like firstly, secondly, in addition, and in contrast. But some sentences are long, so the flow becomes a little heavy. Use shorter sentences sometimes.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, each body paragraph has one main idea, which is good. To improve more, make the topic sentence at the start of each body paragraph even more direct.
task response
For task response, you answer the question and give a clear opinion: you disagree that printed books will disappear.
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For task response, you give relevant reasons, such as ease for old people, no need for power, privacy, and the value of the real book.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your introduction and conclusion are both present and clear.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your ideas move in a logical order from one paragraph to the next.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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