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Some people think that governments should spend money on improving public transportation, while others believe that building new roads and infrastructure is a better use of public funds. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many believe that distributing money to public transport is more beneficial than creating a new infrastructure,
while
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controversial
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 side have opposite opinion.
This
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 essay will analyse both sides and give my own idea. On the one hand,
Investing
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investing
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 in public transportation may
makes
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 it easier to commute,
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also can
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and can also
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 reduce waiting time for passengers as it increases the number of public vehicles.
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, as public transports like trains and buses will be up to the next stage
even
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vacansies
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vacancies
 will be created.
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, if a new train starts working between two
regions
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regions,
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 there will be a need for a driver and a co-driver
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as
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 well as the new
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also
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.
As a
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result
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 it will be
usefull
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useful
 for both passengers and local people
also
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.
On the other hand
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, building a
convinient infrastucture
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convenient infrastructure
 might
decline
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decrease
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 the number of traffic jams and reduce
times
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commuting times
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 for commuting.
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,
this
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 approach will have a great
affect
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 on the number of car accidents because new
roads
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 are more likely to be soft and without any pumps and
deepths
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depths
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.
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, faulty
roads
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 that are outdated and with holes make it compulsory
to drivers stressing
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for drivers to stress
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 and in most
cases
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 it will eventually lead to repercussions. In conclusion, investing money
on
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 public transport and constructing new
roads
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 are essential features. But
i belive
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I believe
 that building new
roads
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surpass
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surpasses
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 the essence of public
trensport
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transportation
 as it shortens waiting time and
decrease
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decreases
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 traffic
congestions
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congestion
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task response
Answer both sides in a more full way. Your view is there, but it needs to be clearer and stronger from the start.
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Add one or two more clear ideas for each side. This will make your answer feel more complete.
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Use examples that are more clear and more exact. Some examples now are too general.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear 4-part shape, which is good. Keep this plan.
coherence and cohesion
Some linking is basic or not natural. Use simple links like On the one hand, On the other hand, Also, For example, As a result.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main point easier to follow. Put one idea first, then explain it, then give one example.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and word choice, because some parts are hard to understand.
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You discussed both views and gave your own opinion, so you answered all parts of the task.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphing well: intro, two body parts, and conclusion.
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You gave examples in both body paragraphs, which helps support your ideas.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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