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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. [Beechwood Farm plans]

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If we look at the
pictures
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 we will see how Beechwood
Farm
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 has changed
along the
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over
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 time. Years ago, in 1950, Beachwood
Farm
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 was a
tipycal
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typical
farm
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. A track crossed the
farm
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, so farmers could reach the barn and the farmhouse passing by the fruit trees, and the place where the soft fruits and the vegetables were growing. At the opposite side of the truck
,
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apply
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 was the field where the
sheeps
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sheep
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 were situated. That was close to the farmhouse,
were
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where
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 chickens were
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 situated. All the
farm
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 was
sourrounded
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surrounded
,
at
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to
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 the south, by a river.
Nowadeys
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Nowadays
, the
farm
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 has suffered changes. Modern life brought to the
farm
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 some needs to survive. The main change was the road that replaced the track. Now
is
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it is
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easyer
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easier
 to arrive
any
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at any
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 place
in
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on
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 the
farm
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. There is a parking
zone
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 near the road where the
sheeps
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sheep
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 used to eat grass. We can
also
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 find a camping field and Solar panels in that
zone
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. Another parking
zone
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 can be
find
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found
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 where the solar panels are situated. Just in front of the first parking
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zone
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zone,
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 we can see a
farm
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 shop. The old barn was replaced
for a
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with
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 holiday cottages, and relocated close to the chickens, near the river.
Lot
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A lot
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 of things have changed since 1950, and Beechwood
Farm
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 is not an exception. Modern times had come, and everyone had to
be adjusted
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 to new ways of living. We still have Beechwood
Farm
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, but a
new
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new,
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 sophisticated and modern one.

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Write a clear first line that says what the two plans show.
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Report the main changes first, then add key details. Do not add ideas like 'modern life' or 'to survive' because the plan does not show this.
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Include more exact comparisons, such as what was removed, what stayed, and what was added.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by area of the farm, not by small points only. This will make the report easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words like 'in 1950', 'today', 'on the west side', 'by the river', and 'in contrast'.
coherence and cohesion
Check place names and details carefully so each sentence matches the map.
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You compare the farm in 1950 with the farm today.
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You mention several key changes, like the road, parking, shop, camping field, and holiday cottages.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a beginning, a middle, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
Some time words help the reader follow the report, such as 'in 1950' and 'nowadays'.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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