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Band 4.5

Many people lose their income due to CoVid19 pandemic. What solution that can do by government or individual to overcome this problem.

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CoVid19 could be one of the most impactful
pandemic
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pandemics
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 of
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 era that has caused the downfall of many businesses. In my opinion, I think the problem of
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 scale
have
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has
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 to be solved properly by
government
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the government
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. The system can help the victims of
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 financial crisis with supports to
business
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 to recover and start hiring
people
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 back, leading to more occupational opportunities for those who were laid off
due to
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 the CoVid19's influence on
corportates
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corporations
.
Government
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The government
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 could start by
provide
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providing
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 financial convenience for businesses of all tiers. Starting with
reduce
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reducing
 taxes
of
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 imports and exports for 1 year.
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 idea not only
just
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apply
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assists domestic
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business
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businesses
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 to start over with
smaller
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a smaller
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 investment, but
also
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 attracts foreign
business
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 opportunities. If a specific country could do
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 early, it is likely that it will convince other nations, whose economy is still on
idle
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hold
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due to
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 the pandemic, to invest and recover before others. When the economy recovers,
corporates
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corporations
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 will
inevitibly
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inevitably
 recruit more
people
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, in order to keep up with the
business
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 coming back to normal. With
people
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 having jobs, ready to spend money
;
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along with
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 all facilities that can recover
back
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apply
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the state
before
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to what it was before
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 the pandemic, the world's economy will eventually be back to
healthy
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a healthy
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 status in no time In conclusion, to solve the issue of
people
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 losing incomes,
government
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the government
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 will need to support both
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business
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businesses
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 and
citizen
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citizens
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.
Corporates
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Corporations
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 will need to be able to come back with
affordable
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an affordable
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 investment. Only
then
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, individuals will have jobs in order to cope
the
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with the
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overall
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 economic system.

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task response
Answer both parts more clearly: what government can do and what people can do.
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Give one or two clear examples to support your ideas.
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Explain your main ideas more fully so the reader can see how your plan works.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, because, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea and all sentences support it.
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You clearly introduce the topic and give your main view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear ending that restates the main point.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is easy to follow most of the time.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial aid
  • Unemployment benefits
  • Job creation
  • Essential services
  • Small businesses
  • Tax relief
  • Retraining
  • Upskilling
  • Remote work
  • Digital infrastructure
  • Mental health
  • Stress management
  • Community support
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Self-employed
  • Pandemic
  • Income loss
  • Workforce
  • Subsidies
  • Telecommuting
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