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The line graph below shows the household recyclling rates in three different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the
recyclling
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recycling
 rates for the UK, France and
Germany
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 in periode of 10 years.
Overall
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,
UK
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the UK
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 and
Germany
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 has increas in value over the years to
end
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 up as the highest in the chart.
whereas
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, France showed signeficant fall
dispite
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despite
 the small rise
at the
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end
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 of 2015.
Germany
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 was
over all the
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the overall
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 country with
best
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the best
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rate
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 after all. In terms of rising trend
counries
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countries
,
UK
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the UK
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 started around 35% to reach 40% and
mentaine
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maintained
this
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 number until 2009,
then
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 it showed
spike
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a spike
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at
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in
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 2009
and
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, and
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 two years
laiter
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later
 it is about 55% and
increas
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increased
 to reach the greatest number in 2015 by more than 60%.
In addition
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,
Germany
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in
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is in
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the
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apply
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second place as it grow steadly frome 2005 at 20%
rate
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 and continue devolping year after year to secure less than 60% in 2015.
On the other hand
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, France shows a
downword
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downward
 trend from starting at 50% of recycling
rate
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 in 2005, to decreas around 5% after every 2
yaers
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years
 to
end
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 up 30% of national household
recycle
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recycling
 in 2013.
Moreover
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, there was
bounce
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a bounce
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 back of the
rate
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 between 2013 and 2015 to
gian
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gain
 10 per cent to close the period to be 40%
at the
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end
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, end, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • household recycling rates
  • trend analysis
  • comparison
  • significant
  • increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • plateau
  • progress
  • environmental implications
  • rate
  • peak
  • upward/downward trend
  • percentage
  • consistently
  • period
  • surpass
  • level off
  • stagnate
  • benchmark
  • time frame
  • sustainable practices
  • waste management
  • recycle
  • dispose
  • landfill
  • renewable resource
  • conservation
  • eco-friendly
  • green initiative
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