In many countries, the cost of living is rising. What are the effects of this on individuals and society. Suggest solutions to this problem.

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In numerous countries, an increase in living costs that affect individual and society. In
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some impacts on the individual, society and provide relevant suggestions.
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, citizens' pressure will be rising that decrease the entire happiness of the country. An increase in living costs means people necessarily have to work more, even if they work more than one job.
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, people finish their daytime job, they need to do another job that balances the living cost without any rest time. Individually, working fundamentally increases the pressure level, without rest time or
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Answer all parts of the task. You wrote about effects, but you did not give clear solutions.
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Write a full ending. Your essay stops in the middle, so the main idea is not finished.
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Make your ideas more clear. Use one main point in each part and explain it fully.
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Add simple examples. For example, say how high rent or food prices can make family life hard.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear order: intro, effects on people, effects on society, solutions, ending.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like first, also, because, so, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence form. Some parts are hard to follow, so the reader may get lost.
coherence and cohesion
Start each new idea in a new paragraph. This will make your essay easier to read.
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You understood the topic and started with an introduction.
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You gave one clear effect on people: more work can lead to more stress.
coherence and cohesion
There is some basic linking, like in this essay and then.
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Your writing tries to follow an essay form.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cost of living
  • rising prices
  • daily expenses
  • household budget
  • make ends meet
  • financial stress
  • low-income families
  • basic needs
  • rent and bills
  • healthy food
  • public transport
  • affordable housing
  • social inequality
  • income gap
  • consumer spending
  • go into debt
  • government support
  • targeted aid
  • minimum wage
  • job training
  • energy-saving measures
  • quality of life
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