The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now

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The given graph displays crucial buildings in the town of Stromer between 1995 an present
time
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. It is obvious that the territory has turned to a urban area over the
passed
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past
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time
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period.
a
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lot of places of residence and shopping have been built since the initial
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. First of all, there was a huge farmland in the southeast in 1995,
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however
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apply
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throughout
this
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time
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period, the territory of the farm has
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down by three times.
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the area had just two residential
complex
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and one shop, but in the present
time
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, the Stromer has 7 residential complexes with 6 apartments and a block of house and the number of shopping centers increased to 5 malls. A new school
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also was
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added in the center and the school is surrounded by the new shopping
centers
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. Nowadays there is
a
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airport, too.
furthermore
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thanks to the evolved roads, the citizens can reach where they want to go.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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