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The internet is amazing and has changed the world. Many people use it. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

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internert
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internet
 has
been
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changed our
orlds
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world
 into amazing parts.Internert is a
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double-edged
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this
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essay
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 I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
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, the
advatages
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advantages
 of using
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internet
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the internet
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is
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are
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 for communication between countries.
One
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people
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 can use the
internet
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 for
vidoe
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video
 calls and phone calls.
Although
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,
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apply
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the
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they
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 can send pictures
for
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to
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 their parents and beloved
people
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.
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the benifits for using
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internet
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the internet
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is
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are
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 in education. Students can have online courses, online tuitoing and
also
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, they have online mock
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tests
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 for preparation for the test.
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most of the
peole they
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people
 agree that shopping
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internet
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on the internet
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 is an amazing way
for shopping
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to shop
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 around the
world
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.
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example
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people
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 can shop from South countries
while
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their
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they are
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 living in
North
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the North
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, they can shop
clothes
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for clothes
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,
acssesories, foods
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accessories, food,
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 and shoes around the
world
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.
Secondly
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,
on the other hand
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, many
people
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 disagree
fo
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with
 using
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internet
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the internet
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.
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people wispered
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People whispered
 that using
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internet
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the internet
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 is just wasting time during their days, some
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people
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people,
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 when they use
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the internet
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internet
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internet,
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they skipped
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 their
importants and
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important
 errands
like
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apply
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,
watching
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like watching
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 movies or
gamming
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gaming
.
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the disadvantages
in
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of
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 using
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internet
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the internet
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that
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are that
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people
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 can face hackers in their accounts.
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,
banks
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banks'
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 accounts that they can hack all their money and they can fake
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people
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people's
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 accounts for
traveling
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travelling
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 or
intering exame
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entering exam
 tests.
Third,
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in
internet
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 we can face bad
people
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 and we can
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internet
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encounter
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 bad
websits
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websites
. As
results
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a result
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 of dark webs its a web
that
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where
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people
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 can meet bad
people
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 with bad habits and thoughts. In
conclution
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conclusion
, the
internet
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 is amazing and has changed the
world
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.
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However
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 my point of view
internet
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 is an excellent
advantages thing
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advantage
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 in our
world
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 and important for our lives.

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task response
Answer both sides in a more equal way. Write the good points and bad points with the same care.
coherence and cohesion
Make your main idea in each body part very clear at the start of the paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words well, like First, Also, However, and Finally. Do not use too many at one time.
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Give one clear example for each main point. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion should clearly sum up the two sides, then give your view in one short sentence.
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Some ideas are hard to follow because of word form and sentence errors. Use shorter sentences to make meaning clear.
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You answered the question and wrote about both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task response
You used some examples, such as online study, shopping, and hackers.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to use link words like Firstly, Secondly, and In conclusion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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