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Band 4.5

“Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge.” Do you agree or disagree?

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Water
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 is
important
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an important
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 factor
of
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for
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creatures as it is necessary for life.
For
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this
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 reason,
Some
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some
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 people think that
water
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 should be
disturbuted
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distributed
 for free as it is a
necessry
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necessity
 of survival
of
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for
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 humans. I firmly disagree with
this
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 view ,as it would likely result in
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increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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water
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 usage and
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increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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 cost.
Firstly
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,
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increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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water
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 usage is often
asssociated
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associated
 with the high
availabilty
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availability
 of resources.
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, in
self serviced
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self-service
 car washes, the
water
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 pump runs with a
speicfic
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specific
 capacity
which
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, which
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 resulted the user
to be caution
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being cautious
 with
his
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their
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 usage. If it
was
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were
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 unlimited, often people lean towards
waste
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 rather than
utlization
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utilisation
.
This
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 leads to
signifcant
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significant
water
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waste
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which
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, which
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 hurts the
avaliblity
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availability
 of
water
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 for the public.
Secendly
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Secondly
,
price
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the price
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 of
water
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raise
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rises
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 if the government gives each house
water
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resouces
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resources
. To clarify, if the government
was
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were
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 required to supply
water
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, they may lean towards the idea of cost raising by increasing
the
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apply
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taxes or other goods prices.
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, they might build new
distilation
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distillation
 of
water
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 factories in the
negiborhood
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neighbourhood
 and might apply taxes for the city
citizons
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citizens
.
Therefor
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Therefore
, price
increase
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 is most properly going to be applied. In conclusion,
offring
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offering
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water
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 for free is not
practical
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a practical
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 solution as it might lead to raise of
water
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waste
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 and higher goods prices. In my opinion,
It
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it
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 might be better to consider a solution
which discount
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that discounts
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water
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 prices for
who
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those who
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saves
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save
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 on
water
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 consumption and reduce plastic
waste
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.
This
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 tends to make
water
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 more
sustanible
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sustainable
 for both
citiztions
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citizens
 and
government
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the government
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 as it
make
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makes
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 pricing reasonable.

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task response
Answer the question more fully. You say you disagree, but you should explain more clearly why free water is not a good idea for all homes.
task response
Make your main ideas more clear. Each body part should have one main point, then explain it with simple steps.
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Use examples that are closer to home water use. The car wash example is not very strong for this topic.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a smoother way. Use simple words like first, also, because, so, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects to the one before it. Some parts jump too fast from one idea to another.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences. This helps the reader know the main point of each paragraph right away.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction and keep it through the essay.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear basic shape: introduction, two body parts, and conclusion.
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You try to support each main point with a reason or example.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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