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The chart below shows the water levels of 6 cities in Australia in October 2009 and 2010.

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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of the maximum
water
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 levels in six Australian cities in October 2009 and 2010.
Overall
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, the second and the sixth cities had the highest rates among the others throughout the period,
whereas
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 the third
city
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 had the lowest. In October 2009, the greatest waterlines were registered in the second and sixth towns, as each accounted for over 70%. Afterwards, in 2010, not only did the figure for the 6th
city
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 increase, but it
also
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 reached a milestone as it almost attained 100%; meanwhile, that of the 2nd
city
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 rose modestly to surpass 80%.
Similarly
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, the 3rd and 5th cities experienced an upward trend in
water
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 levels by rising from above 20% to nearly 40%, and amplifying from 40% to roughly 61%, respectively.
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, having recorded approximately 45% in 2009, the
water
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 height in the first town declined to about 29%
thereafter
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.
On the other hand
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, the fourth
city
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's
water
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 rates remained stable in both years, reaching 50% consistently.

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