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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In several nations, it is believed that a
less
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smaller
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 number of
people
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 gain huge amounts of
salaries
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,
while
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 other believes that governments has impremented certain
rules
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 regarding
salary
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range
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.
Although
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 many industries provide high
cheque
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salaries
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 for top
level
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 staffs, different
tax
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 slaves has made by
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government
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the government
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 for different
income
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range
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ranges
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. Multi-national industries hire
people
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 from different backgroud either
by cultural based
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culturally
 or
educational based
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educationally
.
Such
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company
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companies
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 provide high
salaries
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 because of there duites and responsibilities they
carries
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carry
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. Many
employee
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employees
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 are more accountable
with
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for the
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overall
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 growth of
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company
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the company
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. In
additions
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addition
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, they are more aware
about
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of
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 the condition of
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company
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the company
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. For that, many industries rise there
salaries
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 every
years
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year
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 after changing fiscal years.
This
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 is because
,
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apply
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 those staff have
work
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worked
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 very hard to uplift
economic
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the economic
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stauts
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status
 of that
comapny
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company
 and make high earning industires globally.
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, some
prople
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people
 are from foreigh
due to
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 which
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company
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companies
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 have to pay as per
there
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their
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 native currency, which
relfect
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reflects
 as a high
chequ
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cheque
 at domestice
level
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.
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, Many
people
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 are hired from international hiring
industires
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industries
,
as a
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result
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result,
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 many
people
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 work remotly and they get pay on doller based
which
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, which
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 seems high after foreign exchange.
Furthermore
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,
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government
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the government
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 had different
income
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tax
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 related on
earning
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earnings
. Each countires have there own
rules
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 and regulations related
on
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to
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 earning bases.
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, single and
maried
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married
 staff have
septrate
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separate
rules
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 on there earning. Mostly
governement
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governments
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 implement
such
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rules
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 to create balance among public purchasing power
as well as
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 providing good
facilites
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facilities
 to them
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such
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, such
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 as good hospitality facilities, good
road
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roads
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,
water
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and water
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 supply.
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, 1%
tax
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 is
complusary
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compulsory
 for
low
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low-level
level
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income
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earning
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earners
 for
certain
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a certain
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range
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 of
salaries
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,
while
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income
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tax
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salves
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rates
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 rise as
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salary
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salaries
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 rise. in conclusions,
Several
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in several
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 countries, many
people
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 get high
salary
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 amounts
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while
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, while
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 other thinks
government
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 doesnot allowed to hold
salary
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 above
certain
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a certain
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level
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 of
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salary
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the salary
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range
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. I believe that because of high pressuer many
industry
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industries
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 provide high
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salary
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salaries
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 for
top
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top-level
level
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 staff, despite
that
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the fact that
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government
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the government
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 have rule to pay certatin
level
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 of
tax
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 as per
salary
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range
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.

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task response
Answer both sides more clearly. Say why high pay is good, and why a pay limit may be good.
task response
Give your own view in a clear way. Keep the same opinion from start to end.
coherence and cohesion
Make your main ideas easy to follow. One paragraph should have one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words well, like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
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Explain examples more. Show how each example supports your point.
coherence and cohesion
Write topic sentences at the start of body paragraphs to guide the reader.
task response
You discussed both views, so you understood the question.
coherence and cohesion
You included an introduction and a conclusion.
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You tried to give examples about company pay and tax.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has paragraph breaks, which helps the reader.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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